It started off great, all dark and intriguing, but then it seemed to flop. The unnecessary skipping of time and teasers was confusing and didn't even seem to fit. The story doesn't flow comfortably and the time lapses take away the great chance to add real detail and feeling, which the author doesnt do.
Author's response
I know what you mean :/ I feel like I'm just not part of this story anymore. I agree it's kinda died. Thankyou for the review and for being honest
- Sara xoxo