I thought Frank had already came out to his parents and that's why his dad was calling him a fag all the time and stuff.
Also, which sort of therapy session lasts like a minute? And then, after asking 2 questions, they just tell you to come back tomorrow,no time or anything, just assuming you have nothing else to do. Therapists can't talk about other patients either so he wouldn't have been able to say he knew Gerard. It's ridiculously unrealistic.
You need to watch out for your punctuation too. I've seen sentences started without capital letters, commas where there don't need to be and no comma where there should be one.
I am enjoying the storyline though. Those things just bothered me.
Author's response
thanks for reviewing :)
Sorry about the whole Frank/parents situation, I guess it is a bit unclear. He's more or less bi, but he never really considered a 'real' relationship with another guy (I'll try and clear that up later). Also, about the therapy thing, I do go to therapist/psycologist, and I have had times where sessions had to be cut short for certain reasons...And have been asked to come back some other time. And I also have been told, not of patient's condtitions (of course) but that said therapist knew someone. In the story, the therapists never mentions he knows Gerard from his practice, it could just be from anywhere.
About the punctuation, I'll try and be extra careful (I've always had some trouble with that... :S), but thanks for pointing that out. I'll try my best to reduce the number of errors :)