(#) Amari 2006-02-02
I'm a huge fan of your stories. You write very well. Your plots are interesting, the pranks are hilarious & the storyline moves along well.
However, you do have a tendency to make HP into a sort of superkid or Gary-Stu. He says the right things, does the right things & gets all the action (umm, no pun intended). What about his partner-in-crime, Blaise Zabini? She doesn't seem to do much except follow his lead. Could you develop her character a bit more and give her some more personality please?