i just read you story and its really awesome and Original :) dont get me wrong i really love it but there 2 many people i get confused am just about keeping up as it is i dont think bring more people in would be a good idea but its your story and up 2 you and the pov changes to much it would be good if you just swich it 2 or 3 time in a chapter oh god now i feel really mean please not think am trying to be this is all my opinion so just tell me to fuck off if you want :) hope you have fun on you hoilday and i love the bikey i havent read on before but it really cool XD
xoxo