Good filler, but you need to work on building your characters a little. Mikey and Frank are usually only mentioned. I can get a good grip on the fact that Frank's a juvenile son of a bitch, but I'm not picking up on Mikey. Yes, he's shy. But why is he so close to Gerard? Why does he want to know if Cadence is good enough for his older brother? Think about getting into that stuff soon, or it's gonna be really confusing.
Author's response
Oh, for the the love all things Radke... gimme a break! Ahhh... kidding, dear Adam. But thanks for the little note. I'm really trying to work on Mikey. I want him in the story more, I jut don't know what to do with him. I'll have to work on him, for sure.
xoxo
BJ