You should carry this on, it's really good :)
The only negative thing I have to say is that the random spacing in the middle of a sentence, is that due to the application you're using to write it? Anyway, apart from that, your fanfic is awesome :)
Author's response
yeah,my iphone doest really like ficwad i suppose :/.But thank you,my computer is kinda screwed u at the moment due to my little sister >_>.And I shall continue!!