I kind of find both their situations similar. But the difference is that Gerard is messing with Alyn's head directly and Gerard's dad was causing more or less the same impression, except in the a more violent form. And I also guess that in the beginning Gerard might have took pity on his father, who was after all his father. But then obvioulsy, he changed his mind. But like you mentioned in the previous story, Alyn reminds Gee of himself. I'm glad you updated. Take it slow, don't rush yourself or it won't turn out well. Brilliant writing as usual.It's so good that you actually take pity on the man who has done so much evil. Quite convincing. Have you ever taken up debating?
Author's response
Actually I never really picked up debating, I am more of showing both sides equally, like with this I want to show Gerard in both his vulnerable, and his psychotic nature. Some might find it drawn out but I want them to get the full picture of Gerard's character. Alyn though, she's becoming harder to write for me. I put alot if my own feelings in here about the characters. When Gerard says Alyn's act us old and stale, but hoping she can bring something new to the table. I really find Alyn's character is stuck in a rut. So I'm trying to develop Gerard, the complex character, more so that it sort if compensates fir Alyn being stale. Mikey's a whole other ball game, he's someone I need to develop more as well. Sorry for telling you all this, I just know you understand writing well, and I feel like I can tell you. Maybe you have some ideas?