Fantastic. Very good. Loved it, can't wait for more. Thought I'd get that out of the way and I hope you don't get offended by what I'm going to say next.
Neon Sun is a complete idiot. I'm sorry but she is okay.
I AM IN NO WAY APPROVING THE BEATING OF WOMEN OR ANYONE FOR THAT MATTER BUT COME ON, IF A GIRL CAN FIST FIGHT WITH A GUY THEN HE CAN FIGHT RIGHT BACK IN MY BOOK.
I mean, the girl is a damn good fighter, she can definitely take care of herself so I can't say I have a lot of sympathy for her.
Damn it to hell, they were fighting, she punched him first, kicked him, both actions were repeated multiple times with the intention of assult before he even slapped her and fought back so she can act all innocent but that's not an abusive relationship in my book. Maybe I'd feel differently if they had a history of that shit but clearly, they do not.
That's a good old verbal fight gone out of hand between two people who obviously can't act civilized around each other.
All I'm saying is, if she couldn't take what she dished out, she should've got rid of him for good. I'm sick of this double standard bull people have for co-ed fist fights. Girls can be just as nasty as guys when those things go down.
Moving on, she's an eating disorder girl too, what isn't up with this chick? She needs to calm her shit like right now, that's not healthy.
Whatever, I know a lot fucked up shit went on in her past, I understand and I do feel some level of sympathy for her, but still, she's not a person I'd want to hang around. (Yes, I understand she is a fitcional character, but when a piece of writing is this damn good, these things irritate the fuck out of me.)
I've ranted and spoken my peace, I hope you don't hate me for it. I really love this story, I think it's the best killjoy fic out there.
Oh and by the way, whoever the fuck blatantly plagerized this is some jackass who couldn't write for themself. God, I am so pissed for you, they clearly just cut and pasted! At least make it look convincing! Ugh, the nerve of some people! Fucking rip someone off like that. :\
That is all.
(Note Bene: when I wrote this, I was not running on a lot of sleep as it's nearly five am where I'm from, and that's why it's so damn long and I seem like such a bitch.)
The whole SUn thing will be explained, in chapter 11. It get's all nice and laid out for people to see there. Ah, the ED thing with her is also explained!
The BEST??!?!?!? OHEMGEE! YAY! I know I sound like I'm five, but I love it when people say that!!! :)