Yes, I agree. Sometimes it’s hard to do something original and creative yet still have the sense of reality in it. I think you do a good job at it though. Your stories are always something different and interesting in new ways. It makes them really enjoyable to read.
I see no problem or need to change with that. Ryan angst is a wonderful thing.
Ooh, now I am curious as how everything is going to work out to a somewhat happy ending.
This chapter drew me in, it seemed like I was there with Brendon watching Ryan cower from his father and it was brilliant. I will be waiting for more anxiously.