Review for Escape and Return!

Escape and Return!

(#) deckman1063 2011-08-21

Good stuff so far, I am looking forward to the next chapter. I was somewhat confused by some of the jumps in this chapter - there was little to no transition between scenes. Even a line or something would have been helpful. Apart from that, keep up the good stuff!

Author's response

Each section is marked off by a (when I write it, there are *, but the site changes that to just )

H'm, okay, each section is marked off by one star. I have three when I upload, but the site changeds that to one!