It was really interesting, and kinda different to your other stuff. Maybe because it was less dark?
I personally have this itchy feeling at the back of my mind that there's something else that needs to be said, but can't quite think what it is D:
Second chapters on any of your stories are always brilliant, because you're such a brilliant writer :)
Maybe just some more smut would do it xD But how can Jon & Brenny express their love?! Maybe... They all get drunk and Bren spills? (that's all my pathetic brain can come up with lol)
:O I'll leave you to it ;)