(#) IWCT 2006-02-12
Again more fun. This is a very enjoyable fluffy peice of fanfiction. It seems a little formulatic, but it's relaxing to read a fic where not everyone is caught up in a convoluted plotline that won't end.
Could you put a bit more personality into your pokemon, however? The figuring out what charmander liked to eat was good, but I still don't know how they feel, except for the fact that they all seem to be eternally happy (not that this is bad -- I could definitely use some of that in the fic I'm currently writting, where almost all of my pokemon are anti-social, or arrogant). It would be just nice to know how your pokemon interact with one another, besides how they react with Josie.
More kudos, about twenty, I think. You could start making a soup with them.
^.^ IWCT