(#) jaack 2011-10-31
Awwh, I did like the re-written version. Both were nice but this one seemed to fit a little better. Can't wait to see what you've got coming up next!
Author's response
Thank you. I was actually pretty worrired that people wouldn't like this version as well. But for what I have planned, this version I think will make things less cliche and more realistic. That's what I was thinking when I wrote this, about the long term Thanks for reading and reviewing.