Review for I NEED HELP :)

I NEED HELP :)

(#) Vengefulscout 2011-11-05

Its up to you. I can be in it if you want :) Here is what i came up with
(sorry if there are any speling mistakes):

The lonely crystal moon tonight
Every little moment fills my heart with fright
Unknown creatures whisper past my eyes
Coming from the deep, dark, evil monster cries

Flee with the new night
Hide from the light of the moon
Run, before sunlight
Quick, she is after you

Hurry now,the clock is ticking, you need to get away
She can find you in the darkest shadows in the night and day
Excape before the time beats you and witching hour's past
Oh god help me I just want to live again.
Doom for the dreams

Darkend corners watch me go by
Child laughters chill me, make me cry
I dont want to be dead by the end of day
Leave me now, fade away
The girl is a deamon in the moon light

Scream to the night
Bow before the moon
Fall for the last time
Now, let her take you

Hurry now,the clock is ticking, you need to get away
She can find you in the darkest shadows in the night and day
Excape before the time beats you and witching hour's past
Oh god help me i just want to live again.
Doom for the dreams

(guitar solo)

Hurry now,the clock is ticking, you need to get away
She can find you in the darkest shadows in the night and day
Excape before the time beats you and witching hour's past
Oh god help me I just want to live again.
I want to feel alive.

She can find you in the darkest shadows in the night and day
Excape before the time beats you and witching hour's past
Oh god help me I just want to live again.
Doom for all the dreams

Author's response

Can I cancel out the last paragraph cuz I want the vocalist to scream at the last part so ALIVE is a very good word to scream :) and great lyrics! U r awesome! Thank you soooo much!!!