Poor Mikey. Even though he was never really a part of the story, other thna being mentioned by Gerard, I feel so sorry for him. It's so sad that he died But you wrote it very well. And I feel so sorry for Gerard, too. I mean, the poor guy needs a break. Frank better be good to him and help him. And not break his heart or anything, not that I think he would. Anyways, I love this. It's amazing. But - no offence - do you think maybe there could be a little more Ray in in the story? Or maybe fit in Bob somehow? If you can't, I get it. I know it can be really hard to fit in characters right in the middle of a story. But anyways, I love this so much, it's amazing.
Author's response
Well, as it happens I was considering bringing Ray back into the story soon (Obviously I won't tell you how, so you'll just have to read and find out) and now you've said that I think I will. Ray always makes me smile, so hopefully he could bring some light to this rather sad story.. But as for Bob.. hmmm I haven't planned on putting him in the story, but later on I may have to make up a character like I made up Paul, so perhaps I could just use Bob instead? You'll have to wait and see!