I really enjoyed this little drabble of yours! It was filled with lots of emotion...
Although, I think you could've added more to it to make it flow better and seem less rushed. It kinda sounded like it was repeating a lot of things over again, but hey, that's what constructive criticism is for!
Hope you keep writing more! :) Oh, and thanks again for R&Ring my stories. I'll return the favor and do the same for yours too! ^^
Author's response
I agree 100%! I'll see if i can edit it and switch some things around a little, any opinions you have are more than welcome!!! You keep writting as well, kay!!
~ kaori-chan ^-^