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Tears of Red and Gold
Tears of Red and Gold
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soul-of-the-phoenix
2011-11-26
I saw this "twist" coming a mile away. Also, while this is an interesting idea, there's too much summary and too little physical action. I suggest rewriting some of these scenes as flashbacks, put us in the story rather than reviewing it from afar.