This was wonderful!! I'm sorry to hear about your bad day. You seem like the kind of person that deserves the absolute best. Anyway, this chapter was really interesting. I liked the way it cam together. It really flowed well and provoked great imagery. Gerard just keeps messing everything up. It's fine to be angry that this kid that's known Mikey for about a day knows exactly what he needs and how he should be dealt with and what he feels and what he thinks, but don't say such stupid things about Mikey. It's not Mikey's fault that Frank is the way he is, caring and willing to help. You should know that Gerard. Gerard's a good person in this story, but he really just doesn't know how to control his emotions, and when he's angry or whatever, things just come tumbling out, even if he doesn't mean them. Well, not really anyway. I also like the humor in this chapter before it got to the serious part. The change surprised you, but it wasn't out of the blue. This is what I was saying about the flow. Also, I really like the last part. Gerard wants Mikey to care about him, love him again, but here he is insulting him about the one thing he dislikes about himself. Great job, Gerard. I really mean it. I also like the kiss. It was well described and Iove how you describe why he felt. It was extremely well done. I love everything about this chapter. It was well written and beautiful and just amazing. Also, I really like that adorably amazing switch off line. It was very clever, just like the rest of this story. I have this quick little story. I was searching this site and I saw someone named DisenchantedDestroya. I was like " how could this be?" and I was wonderig about it for a while until I saw your username. I hadn't noticed it before. Well yeah. That is all. Sorry for the length and hope you have a better day tomorrow.
Author's response
Thank you very much; your review has brightened my day!
I'm really glad that you liked this, I really thought that it was on the crappy side. Gerard is meant to come across as a good person in this, just a little confuddled and short tempered; just like you said. I was worried that people would ineterperate this chapter as Gerard just being nasty when it really wasn't meant to porttray that; just that his want to help Mikey and frustration that Frank had gotten further in a day than he has in years. Again, just like you said.
I'm pleased that you liked the humour, as a general rule I suck at making things light-hearted, so to hear that you liked that aspect of it is really encouraging.
About the kiss; I've never actually kissed anyone before, so I'm relieved that you think it sounds alright!
I kinda have a little story about the name thing too. When I signed up I was in such a hurry that I made a typo in my username; great start on a website that's about writing!
Don't apologize about leaving a long review; I always love Reading reviews. The more there is to read the better!
I've got the day off tomorrow because teachers are striking, so I'm sure that it'll be better, thanks.
Thank soooo much for taking the time to review! :)