Review for Fate's Cruel if Life's Great

Fate's Cruel if Life's Great

(#) youcanstakemyheart 2011-12-01

yay! new chapter! anyway-i really liked it and you're AMAZING with descriptions. like the whole first paragraph-just, wow. MAybe a little more dialogue spread through it, to break up the really deep thoughts? I dunno, i think it's pretty awesome though. Please update soon!

Author's response

Thank you very much! I totally get what you're saying about dialogue and I will ensure to spread it out better through the entirety of future chapters; thank you soooo much for letting me know how to improve, it's extremely helpful! Thank you for taking the time to review! :)