oh my gosh frank oh no what have you done og poor gerard oh no he has a new brother ohhh noooooes!
i kinda agree with youcanstakemyheart about spreading dialogue throughout the thoughts, but wow your writing is AMAZING
Author's response
Thank you very much; I agree about the dialogue thing too and will try my best to improve it with future chapters! Thanks for being honest and helping me to improve. Thank you very much for taking the time to review! :)