FicWad

This is unbelievable!! In a good way, of course. The best way. I love your writing, and I would love to help you, but I have no clue as to how you could improve. I mean, your writing is perfect in my eyes and if you could improve upon something that is supposedly perfect, than it isn't perfect at all. It probably just sounds like I'm trying to be nice, but that's not the case. That is really how I feel about your writing and how I view it. I have no doubt in my mind that something heart stoppingly shocking or incredibly well thought out will happen, but that's not really improving, that's more along the lines of surprising your readers and keeping them on their feet. I hope I didn't offend you in anyway. I tried not to word this is a way that'll seem hurtful or anything like that, but a lot of the things I say tend to get misinterpreted often. I'm sorry I couldn't be of any help though. The only thing I have to say is that it seems as if you like to expand on the feelings and thoughts of a character to create more understanding among readers. This is a really, really, really good thing in my opinion and is part of what fuels so much emotion in the reader. That expanding component is lacking in a lot in other stories, and just seems like it's dragging out, but here it is done expertly. It makes me wonder how you could write so well. Anyway, I'm going to leave another review about the actual story, and again I am so so sorry if I offended you in anyway.