I really like this! I totally understand about the song. I've always wanted to write a song and the last time I tried it became more of a joke. I don't play an instrument either, well not really, and that just makes writing a song harder. Well, for me at least. Anyway, I'm very glad to see that you have another poem up. I love reading your writing, it's so original and beautiful. I've never really read things this good until I came across you. Seriously, you could make the most boring things sound fabulous with your writing. I really liked this poem. The repetition added to the mood of the poem. I always find it hard to set any kind of mood in a poem. That's why I dread writing poetry in school. My poetry lacks mood and just sounds like I threw a bunch of lines together. Your poetry is the total opposite and everything just flows together and makes sense. I love it. Great job.
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Thank you; I'm very pleased that you liked it!
I'm forever trying to write songs, but they always turn into some crappy teen-angst fueled poetry that is probably too disturbed to ever see the light of day...
I'm sure that your poetry is fantastic; if you posted it up I'd be sure to read it! If the quality of your reviews is anything to go by, I'm certain that your writing is great!
We never do creative writing at my school, which is probably why I do so much at home. I'd kill to be able to write poetry in class for my teacher to criticsise.
Thank you very much for taking the time to review! :)