It's a great story. A simple plot which has been described brilliantly. The emotions and the feeling of uncertainty are expressed well. There are no grammatical errors. Just be careful of some spelling errors. I know you're editing it, but if you need anyone to proof read your work you can send me an email. Otherwise, it's a warm and captivating story. It isn't repetitive or boring. In the beginning the formatting was hard on the eye, but towards the end it was formatted very well. There is a clear train of thought and it is very professional. It has been written extremely well and I have enjoyed it thoroughly. I think you’re biggest plus are the descriptions. They are fantastic and help you create the perfect atmosphere for the reader. It is very believable and it helps the reader empathize better with the characters. A utterly stunning job on the whole.
Author's response
Wow, thank you very much!
That really means alot, I really appreciate it!
Aha, yea the editing gets a bit tedious, I would definitely be interested in a proof read, I'll let you know :)
Thank you very much for reviewing! xx