Great chapter. I noticed your christmas story but I haven't read it yet. I shall. Anyway, Merry Christmas! I'm a day late but it's the spirit that counts! A well woven chapter and a good job overall. A few spelling errors but they weren't major. The story is moving at a decent pace, not too fast or slow. It's thoroughly entertaining on the whole.
Author's response
Haha, thanks! Merry Christmas to you too for two days ago :P I like to think it's still Christmas haha, as long as the decorations are still up :P
Yeaaaa I need to finish edititing it, I will definitely get in touch if I need a proof read :) It will be useful for when I go back to college and don't have time to check it myself :)
Thank you for reviewing, I'm glad you enjoyed it :) xx