This is absolutely not dragged out and I believe this to be a fantastic chapter. You are by far the best author I've ever seen on any writing/fanfiction site at all and there is a lot of bad stories out there and I can assure you that this is the last thing that I would call bad. Anyway, I really liked that this was in Pete's point of view. You have established such different voices for them and it's done very well. It clearly shows through an is a lot better than I have seen in some other stories. With this I was so surprised that Pete and Aaron had that little thing. It was such a shocking twist and it is one of those things that can completely change the story. I love things like those in stories. I also love Pete in this. He's so caring and he'd do anything to keep Mikey safe, but unlike Frank he's in love with Mikey. He wants to date him and to be his boyfriend and he wants to be able to keep on tasting what cute tastes like. He's naturally flirtatious, but he knows that he has to let Mikey be the one to make the move first and he knows Mikey has a crush on him as well. I thought it was really sweet that he knew and I'm a sucker for things like that. I also really liked that Pete could basically sum up Frank and Gerard's personalitites from what Mikey said. He knows there's a reason why Mikey always praises Gerard, and I really like that he picks up on the fact that that's not the case at all. I rarely come across good Pikey, which is the reason that I don't read it as often as I'd like to, but I know that the Pikey in this will be done wonderfully. I also really liked the ending. I can't wait to see what happens when they get home. And I also really liked the heartbeat thing. It was such a cute thing to do and Mikey in this story just seems like he would come up with something like that. I mean, he did but it was such a Mikey thing to do. I really want to see what their meeting with Gerard will be like. Pete and him are so different, but then again Frank and Gerard are so different. Gerard wants to be perfect for the people he loves, but Pete he realizes that there is no such thing as perfect when it comes to people. He just knows that their coming together will be perfect. I shall stop here because if I tell you all that I liked about this I will just bore you. I can go on for days about all that I liked with this, but that would just be mean. I can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's response
Thank you very much; the things that you said
in this review are probably some of the nicest things anyone has ever said about my writing. You're always so kind about what I write and I feel that I don't convey how much it truly means to me; just know that I really am extremely grateful that you took the time to be nice about the crap I write!
I'm relieved that you think they all have different voices, I was worried that I'd written Frank and Pete as too simillar.
The whole Pete and Aaron thing wasn't a part of the plan, it just kind of happened but I'm kinda glad that it did because I can play with it later on in the story. I'm glad that it surprised you, I want to keep this as interesting as possible.
I'm pleased that you like the way I did Pete in this, I really wanted to finally give Mikey something nice. I wanted Pete to come across as someone who really can keep Mikey safe and make him smil whenever he's down. I also wanted to have this kind of thing were it's like Pete wants to go out with him, but not until he knows for sure that he will be able to the best boyfriend possible; like he wants to be his boyfriend but only once he understands Mikey completely so that he can look after him. I wante. Pete to understand Frank and Gerard before he met them because that means a bit more fun for me when Pete (who isn't Gerard's biggest fan ever) finally does meet the older Way brother...
I love Pikey (it's currently drawing with Frikey as my favorite pairing). There are some fantastic Pikeys out there, the best two that I've come across are under my favorites on my profile page; you should check them out, they're totally awesome!
The heartbeat thing is something that I picked up on a little in the prequel and I'm really pleased thatyou think it sounds cute, that's what I was hoping for.
Pete and Gerard will meet in a few chapters time... I've planned their meeting; expect a fair few of Gerard's prequel elements to come into play...
Your reviews could never bore me; they light up my day and I'd read them all day if I could!
Thank you sooooo much for taking the time to leave such a kind, detailed review! :)