In my honest opinión i think maybe you should first add a little more. Like them arriving at the MTV awards, what happens there(of course they win) but how they celebrate. It just seems like you left it at a wrong place, but i cant wait to read the follow
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I was thinking about it and I think your right. I'm gonna continue "Backstage Animals" then start on the sister story. I honestly gave up on "Backstage Animals" but your comment gave me a drive so I thank you from the pit of my soul for those words.