Wow. That was sooo cute and cheesy!!!
I loved it.
However. There is a criticism. I think that when Frank kissed Gerard, gee should've pushed away and been all like O_o no this is wrong etc.
It seemed rushed. Cuz I don't think gee would be like :'( to :D
He needs time to accept it in his mind.
I AM NOT TRYING TO MAKE YOU FEEL LIKE A CRAPPY AUTHOR!!! IN NO WAY ARE YOU A BAD AUTHOR!!! I DON'T WANT TO OFFEND YOU
xø M_R_R
Author's response
Oh my gosh. I want to thank you for this a million times over. Honestly, I do.
This story WAS rushed. I wrote it at, like, 2 in the morning. Since I wrote it I have constantly been trying to think of a way to improve the ending and this is the first concrete and workable suggestion I've gotten for how to do that!! When I find a bit of spare time, I will see about working with this idea to improve the ending!!
THANK YOU so much!!