Review for Hero
I'm actually glad you put that twist in the end, becuase I hate it when fics go too fast and the characters are in love and want to get married by chapter 3. I dunno, it just irritates me-.- so the fact that you put that in is good. Again with the fucking cliffhanger though! Jeez... Although your explanation for why you do it is exactly the same for me...
Also, I have one more point to raise here, just some constructive criticism- could you make your paragraphs slightly shorter? Just like cut them in half or something. Becuase its a lot of information in one block, and my mind gets overloaded:S apart from that, good work, and make your next chapter longer!;)