This is just my opinion, and I don't know how much it matters to you, but I think this is the best chapter of this story you've written so far, maybe even of all of the stories you've ever written. I love how it gives off this sense of saddness, but there's still hope, especially at the end. Even though he's always seemed real, Frank never seemed all that human to me until this one chapter, because he always seemed to be sad or angry. This chapter shows that he feels other things, though. It shows that Frank is pretty much like everyone else. Also, Gerard seems more real now, too. At first he seemed somewhat perfect, but now he seems like there's more to him. Great chapter, keep writing!
Author's response
Thank you so freaking much, this review literally made my day. I was unsure about this chapter, but I'm feeling a lot better about it now (: thanks so much for taking the time to give me a long review, it really means a lot :D
CosmicZombie xo