Well written and moving but I dunno, it kinda felt like it was missing something. Like, an ending. If it's just meant to be a oneshot about Gerard thinking about suicide and feeling pretty sad then okay but if it's supposed to have a more defined plotline then I would expand on this. Sorry if you think I'm being too harsh, I'm just tryna be honest.
Overall I liked it though, it was a nice piece.
SF
Author's response
It's an entry Gerard submitted to a contest about suicide. It wasn't supposed to have a plot line-- I just wrote everything I was feeling down and halfway through realized it could be a bit of a story. I appreciate honesty, it's nice to hear constructive criticism.