That's what I call talent. It's only a first chapter but wow! seems to me that it's gonna be one of those truly awesome stories. Frank Iero once said about Gerard's blog "his posts are fucking gripping, like you can't put the computer screen down, in fear that you may miss the secrets of the universe revealed to you in the middle of his thoughts" and it really fits here as well. Keep writing
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Your reviews are the best, one day I'm gonna print them and read them when I'm down. You're awesome ^^