Hey there :3
Thank you very much for this. I love getting constructive critisicm - and my typing is one I have to work on, big time :) And my grammar. I'm really pleased you like it though!
(Especially the pace and chararcters, I have mild panic attacks about trying to get them right and not annoying - particularly the massive four year jump.)
Do you think there's any specific things that annoy you about the fic in general?
Also, Twenty Ways make me laugh so hard, and I haven't really been following Trying To Escape, because I prefer either happier fics or really dramatic ones.
But, really, thank you - I'm so, so, so happy you like it!
Author's response
I know you love getting criticism, it's half of why I started doing this. I noticed some of the authors I like, such as you, looking for advice from bvbrocks and others who do these review type things. Typing is hard, I understand.
(The four year jump made me so sad. I teared up. It was just... Oh Gerard.)
About the fic in general... nothing really annoys me. Well, I hate som eof the characters but I believe I'm supposed to hate everyone that isn't Ray, Frank or Gerard. And Mikey, but I'm not sure he counts... Anyway, no, the writing style is easy to follow and the Person (1st, 2nd, 3rd) was well-suited for the fic. If you changed the Person, it would have an entirely different atmosphere, and I like the one you have set up.
Anytime sweetness ;) (Oh dear lord I just referenced You Can Hide a Lot About Yourself by I_am_a_Graveyard... le sigh.)