First of all- Ive been a massive fan of your writing for aaaages. "Trying to escape the inevitable" is like my fav fanatic ever.
And though I like where this story is going, would you mind if I gave you a hint of advice??? You're aptitude for vivid imagery is incredible, but sometimes I notice that you've used the same word too many times in too short of a space. In this chapter I found the words "ruby," "scarlet" and "bedraggled" popped up a few times each which gave the text a repetitive nature. I've also noticed this in some of your other writings, and felt like I should mention my thoughts. I hope you don't mind me pointing out a flaw, I just know that I appreciate constructive criticism and hope you do too.
But otherwise - gosh, you really have a gift. The amount of thought and effort you put into your work is evident in every line. I'm constantly hanging out for more. Keep up the fabulous work!
Author's response
Thank you so much, I'm so happy you like my work! And I really appreciate constructive criticism (If it really IS constructive- like yours is!), thanks for the advice, I'll keep that in mind for future chapters/stories, and will go back and edit this one in the next couple of days probably.
Again, thank you so much...this review made my day :)
Thanks for taking the time to review!
CosmicZombie xo