HM... I do enjoy it thus far, and the only complaint is the paragraphing... sometimes there's a space between two paragraphs and other times there isn't. Off to a good start... a tinsy bit cliche, but I'm placing bets on that changing.
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With the paragraphing, I'm sort of trying to seperate where there's a jump in it, but I can take that out if you think it looks better without:)
I'll admit, it is cliche but I needed a way to get into the story, now this is done I can introduce the plot :D