I love this! I agree with jack-the-ripper though, you do use 'like' a lot. I applaud you for trying out a different style (never heard of a NOT fic before!) and it works, at the start I found it a bit annoying, but after a while I find it suits the story tone. it could also work if you're writing in Gerard's P.O.V, but hey, I'm not writing the story, am I?!
So yeah, good job and can't wait till next update! :)
Author's response
I'm so glad
and Yeah I think I over used it a little at the begining but I've been cutting down over the last few chapters
It's my first time writing one and it's olot of fun xD
Thank you! It wont be long!