God, that was so good. You'd better end up being in a band when you're older, 'cause that was absolutely BRILLIANT- and I would totally buy all your albums xD Seriously, though, I think that was professional standard- fuck, it was better than a lot of professional songs I've heard. It flowed perfectly, the message was unique and interesting and very relatable, the vocabulary was great, and the rhythm flowed perfectly. Also, the chorus? Gold. Fucking Gold. Really catchy and original, and I can tell it's gunna stick in my mind- after I read it, I found myself going around humming it for the next couple hours! :L
Sorry, this review's turned out kinda long, hasn't it? :L
Anyway, whatever you do KEEP WRITING! You could really go places, honey.
CosmicZombie xo
Author's response
Thank you very, very much! And I'd love to be in a band; my friend (who plays bass... kinda) and I desperate to get one together. The fact that you of all people think this is good enough to sound somewhat professional really means a lot to me! I wasn't too sure about the chorus, so it's very nice to hear that you thought it was alright.
Don't apologize; long reviews make me smile! :D
I most definitely will!
Thank you very, very much for taking the time to leave such a lovely review! :D :) :D