Ohhh, that was good! I'm not usually a fan of self-harm type stories, but this one was so simple and so sad it just had to be effective. The ending I thought was especially good; the way you wove the lyrics into the last few sentences worked so well and fitted perfectly with the story. I don't know why, but it created a strong image in my head, especially this line: 'pale skin and jutting bones and a veil of greasy black hair'. I really liked this, good stuff. Thanks very much for posting!
Lucy X_O
Author's response
Thank you so much. It really means a lot. I didnt wanna make it too self harm'y so it was just depressing with no plot so im really glad that it didnt come across like that.