You worked your ass off and it shows. I especially loved the first part, Belle's memory, that was amazing and really fills up the history behind their relationship.
Brock is dirty. Fact.
I was suprized at Patrick's behaviour towards Pete but then again, it's totally adequate and relates to the feelings he's having to deal with for Belle in this situation.
It sflows beautifully and to see the plot unfolding is just a pleasure to read.
I really want Belle to kick his ass. But I'm solid to my ethos that writers should write to please themselves and not the reviewers/lurker readers.....
continue.
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Can't wait. Honestly. I'm waiting. Move along. SERIOUSLY! STOP READING THIS. WRITE!! DAMNIT.
Author's response
wow. this review blows my mind. let me use this opportunity to tell you i am in love with you.
on a less lesbian note, i added the memory to do exactly that. i'm glad it stuck.
brock is the greatest evil villain ever. well, maybe not ever, but he's good at what he does.
patrick isn't made about the relationship. he's seen the two of them together, he kind of knew it was inevitable. he's upset because he feels like pete is taking advantage of his sister, who he can't protect at the moment. had the situation played out differently, and patrick weren't under so much stress, he probably wouldn't have reacted the way he did.
again with the flowage. thank you.
the next is a doosie.
now i'm going to write. right after i read your update. hehe