Review for Intoxicated


(#) copperose 2006-11-01

In your summary, "esk" should be "esque"

Some of the punctuation is off. Investigate the use of semi-colons.

If something is 'needless to say,' don't say it.

The parentheses throw it off sometimes.

It's an interesting tale, though. It would be a lot easier to read if someone went over some of the punctuation, though.