(#) Zucht 2012-07-16
I really like this story you've started. The talking photo album is brilliant! The fight between Hrmione and Ginny was tense and exciting and a bit confusing at the end (the wink).
Three things:
1. your A/Ns are too long.
2. if you have to explain a story point in your A/Ns, you need to delete the A/N and fix the story point.
3. you said that you're going canon in the next chapter... why? I've read the book, listened to the audio book, seen the movies... So why should I read fanfiction that is just the same? It's boring!! Please think on that.
Author's response
1. I like long A/Ns. Just like I love long replies. They are just Notes. You can ignore them if you want.
2. In order for Harry to go in-depth think about the date, he would need a calendar. Which I doubt he has. And he can't exactly consult his own Lexicon website. And Narrators shouldn't have their own monologues.
3. The first five chapters of the story, I'm following through canon's perspective. Everything happens, with different reactions from Harry and Hermione. Wouldn't you like to know how he would respond to certain things if he were... well, smarter?
Sixth chapter, everything changes. Of course, you'd be missing A LOT in-between. But, of course, I could tell you what you missed in an author's note.
Deathly Hallows: Take Two - a second take on Deathly Hallows. There wasn't supposed to be so much of a change. I said in the beginning that it's mainly for those who hadn't read Deathl Hallows, although that changes as the story goes on. I suppose some would be confused at some parts.
Thank you for reviewing!