The story is a good one, with the usual spelling errors and punctuation - (joined words etc.). Definitely an AU and darker story. So far this story would fit in ff.net, I'm guessing you're planning things that won't fit their criteria? Revenge is a great motivator but this story has the feel of more than simple revenge. Taking out Ron was something that was unique in any stories that I've read. By Hermione, no less! Let's see how Ginny reacts to that. We already know that Molly would go ballistic. Neville and Susan are a good ship, but let's pair Luna with someone decent. No suggestions there, unfortunately. On second thought, maybe Fred or Charlie? Difficult call on that though. Hermione sleeping with Harry (finally) will be a bit early to take their relationship to the next level, but plenty of snogging works for me. I'm assuming that you will follow canon for the happenings at Hogwarts... Snape, the Carrows and other things. You stated that all magical children were required to attend Hogwarts, but then you mentioned that muggleborns would not. Can you clarify this or am I missing something?
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Took me a few minutes to find out how to reply, heh.
I may change the story up a bit. There is a shockwave happening from Harry and Hermione's actions.
Glad to see that Hermione beating up Ron is a new concept for most people, but it also disappoints me. In all the stories I've seen that says 'Ron-bashing', sure she kicks him in the nuts and slaps him in the face, but after that, Harry fights all of her battles.
As to who I'm pairing Luna up with, well... you'll see.
I never actually gave much thought to how Ginny would react. I put up a poll on ff.net on who she should be with, and Neville won.
....I should really get to explaining why I broke that to all of them.
And they're not exactly sleeping with each other. They are comforting each other. It's not a nightly occurrence. More fort-nightly.
spelling errors? punctuation errors. Oh, poo. I used to pride myself on having as few errors as possible. Well, I just got the beta-ed chapter sent to me.
In the original book, All magical children are required to go to Hogwarts. Except muggleborns. So they're all on the run. Same goes for all Muggleborns, children or adults. In fact, there's also a reward for snatchers who bring in any muggleborns, whether they say the Taboo or not.
This effects Ted Tonks, the Creevey brothers, and Dean Thomas (he was a half-blood, but he didn't have the papers to prove he was related to a wizard) mainly.
Anyway, thank you for reading and reviewing.