I think this is great! It was really interesting to read. I thought the description about how much he wished he didn't say anything or the teachers didn't hear and how he was really nervous to do the student-student counseling was terrific. The language was so vivid that I could practically feel Frank's nervousness and his regret of ever saying anything to his teachers. I really liked that even if Frank didn't want the counselor help or the student help, he did kind of know that he had issues. I also really liked how you introduced us to Frank's problem with the paperclip daisy chain. I thought that was really clever and creative. This was really original and written
really well. You really did pull me into Frank's world. Great job and I'm so excited to see what's next!!!
Author's response
Thanks! I'm glad you found it interesting because I wasn't sure if it was a little too dull, what with there being no actual dialogue yet. It's good to know that you thought the bit about his nervousness worked out alright; I really wanted to get across how he was feeling, all his regret about ever opening his mouth. The paperclip daisy chain just kinda popped into my head when I couldn't think of how to start this, so I'm glad you thought that worked out alright as an opener.
Thank you very much for taking the time to leave such a kind and detailed review! :D