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Okaii here it goes....
So when I first started reading this story I will admit, it didn't really seem to be my cup of tea. I didn't really understand the world you had created at first(Although that was most probably the fault of the state my mind had been in when I read the first chapter or two) and then despite the fact you had created an entire new world it seemed as though you had put unoriginal characters into it. Mostly I was suckered into it by boredom and your proper grammar/spelling skills (Which an amazingly large amount of people on this site lack) and so I kept reading. Then I was super-shocked by the length of your chapters but it was a nice surprise because as I kept reading I became more intrigued when things started to happen. Soon I found myself excited when I got the email saying you updated and then I found myself really looking forward to your next chapters. I was glad to see that as the story progressed the characters quickly became more defined (I've read a large number of stories where every character is basically the same, your story is not one of them) and their traits didn't waver and stayed true to what you had described them in the first place. Along with that I also liked the descriptions you added of things here and there that just made the story better on a whole. Plus the pacing is well done; things move along nicely, not too fast and not extremely slow either. Add that in with an interesting plot line like the one you have and it's genius. Now as I read your story I am so astonished at how much I enjoy it and anxiously look forward to every chapter. It's simply marvellous.
And now as I read this over I do realize it may not seem as though I am complementing you very much but I will restate the reasons you are awesome in simple form so you can really understand what I am trying to say:
-You created an entire new world I haven't heard of before
-There's proper grammar and spelling
-The chapters are super long
-Your characters are well defined
-The traits of characters don't waver
-Descriptions are nicely done
-Throughout the story the pacing stays perfect
-The plot line is intriguing and interesting
So seriously, you should take all of these points as accomplishments because those are some pretty impressive achievements to have under your belt. I am so ready to read the next chapter (and the chapter after that) and I hope you continue writing for a long time because you are very good at it (Okaii, 'very good' doesn't really cover it but you should know what I mean) and I have a feeling I will enjoy almost everything you write. (Unless you lose all spelling capabilities, then I just can't)

Hopefully that all made sense. Good luck with future writing. :)

~Gabe.XX~