Amazing like always. SOOOOO, I think you should drag this out a bit, not like TOOOO long but don't go into a real thick, twisty plot TOO soon. Ya know? Make it all intense and crap. Well, now I feel like I'm telling you how to write your story so I apologize becuase I CERTAINLY dont have room to do that, what with all my crappy fics.
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Awww, thank you! I'm just not too sure HOW to drag it out. Oh, I shall figure le something out soon! cheers xx