Well damn. The only piece I wrote of this voted down to cliche, didn't know it was that bad :(. Oh well, good luck with this. I told you my ideas were trash though.
Author's response
No it's good. I think it's just cause I have a bad rep on this site and not because anyone read it and I haven't really redeemed myself because I'm a 'silent reader' most of the time. Thanks for letting me use it, it really got my creative juices flowing again. I know this story is going in a completely different direction than yours but maybe we could do a spinoff of both and merge our ideas together. Do a little collab? Yes?