This is NOT all crtique, remember that.
#1.Story length is perfect.
#2.Your story already has lots of deth.
#3.You dont have to spell all the words perfectly.
#4.It's okay that your grammer and punctuation aren't all corect.
#5.Descriptiveness.The story is good length and exciting.
#6.It's a great stat for your story.
#7.YOU ROCK!!!
(note:Please put in some A/A fluff in the next chapter?)