Have you ever seen the movie call "A knights tae' anyway in that movie theres this guy that wants to be a knight. Wel for the m,ovie they use contmpory terms and saying for the audiences benifit. That way you get a better understanding of whats going on. That is what this reminded me of. Now that being said I am assuming that is what you want to do here.
The banter action was some what amusing and the content of the banter was amusing too. But so far nothing that made laugh aloud. the forat as a discriptive script is a new to me. But I can see how it can save a lot of time using this format. This is something that I could see more done as Anime then as live action.
Author\'s Response: In fact, this story was written as a parody of anime cliches.
Author\'s Response: But it was not inspired by "A Knight's Tale."