Okay, I'm pretty sick right now, so this'll be short.
This is amazing. You are so talented, and I really hope you know that. This story is just so alive, and I will never stop loving it. You make it look so effortless, and yet it's impossibly perfect. It's just breath-taking.
I really hope you continue with this, but it's your call. If you don't feel like it's worth continuing, or if you want to re-write it, then it's your decision. I'm just glad that you made it this far.
~ Haili