Wow, I really like it. It's a talented beginning that definitely grabs at attention. My attention has been fully captured.
It says completed and I know it was your assignment but it would be really cool if you followed up on it. It's interesting already, and emotionally evoking. It would be interesting to see where it went, if you decided to take it somewhere.
Author's response
Thank you very much! It's really good to know that it grabbed your attention, because I think that's what I really struggle with as a writer.
I did think about turning this into a fanfiction, but then I decided to keep it original and all ideas kinda evaporated. I do have a few ideas for it, but I think it will remain as a short one-shot for the foreseeable future.
Thank you very much for taking the time to review! :D