That was...Wow. So simple, yet so evocative and powerful. So horribly yet beautifully real- your writing is just stunning, okay? You should be really proud of your talent.
If you decide to continue this, I'd be fascinated to read it, but it works equally well as a oneshot.
Yet another piece of brilliant fiction whose world you've created for me to escape to. Thank you so much for posting this.
xo
Author's response
Thank you very, very much! Seriously, your review has actually made my day!
I am kinda tempted to carry this on because I sort of want to see where it could possibly go, but at the moment I don't think I'll be adding to it anytime soon.
Thank you sooooo much for taking the time to leave such a nice review! :D